Peer review of Article Kimberly V. by Claudia N.
Weblog article peer review form
Weblog Article Peer Review Form A – First Review
Writer’s Name Kimberly Vegting
Assessor’s name Claudia Nieweg da Silva Marcos
Date 24-09-2007
Rating Scale: 1 = Yes 2 = Somewhat 3 = No
Rate the article by giving a 1, 2 or 3 for each question. Read the article once to geta general idea of what it is about, then read it a second time to rate it.
1. Is the topic interesting? 1
2. Is the title original and appropriate? 3
3. Is the introduction complete? 2
4. Is the body of the article complete? 3
5. Is the conclusion well-developed? 3
6. Is the article well-organized overall? 2
7. Is the article easy to understand? 2
8. Is the article interesting to read? 1
9. Has the writer plagiarised material? 3
Finally, read the article a third time and check it for spelling, grammar andpunctuation. Mark any corrections on the article itself then complete the rest ofthe form.
Name three things you like about the article.- Explanation of 3 ways of in-game advertisement- Names of in-game advertisement companies- Explains a little bit of what it is.
Name three things the writer should improve.- The introduction should explain what in-game advertising is.- More heads in the body and in the body explain 3 ways to use in-game advertisement, - More words
What is the gist of the article?In-game advertising is becoming popular and there are 3 ways to use it.
Do you think this article is good enough to pass the course? Explain your answer.No because it is to short, has no good body and grammar was a bit off.
Give the writer this completed form and the article with corrections.
Article version 1 Kimberly V.
Kimberly V.
CV203C2
Date: 23-09-2007
In-game advertising
Advertising isn’t limited to billboards or posters, but your advertising can be integrated in a game.
What’s in-game advertising?
There are three kinds of in-game advertising. One is advertising as a object in the game, your product is being used in the game. For example if O’Neill wants to do in-game advertising they can advertise in an surf- or snowboarding game, product from the O’Neill collection will be used. In a surf game they can use the new summer collection and in a boarding game they can use the winter collection.
The second kind of in-game advertising is advertising in the game like you do in the real world.On a surfboard, a billboard, drinks, etc.
There are a few company’s working with in-game advertising and IGA is the biggest. Also AdsNGames is getting bigger in in-game advertising, they are working with the third kind of in-game advertising and that is having a game on your company’s website. It’s just a fun game to play and not made for your own company but to promote your website.
In-game advertising is getting more and more popular but is still a very new field for all participants. Many gamers recognize that it’s getting popular because gamedevelopers get more money and games can be of a higher level.
Alex, Y. (07 November 2006). In-game advertising. [Online posting]. Viewed on: 18-09-2007, from: http://alexyip.wordpress.com/2006/11/07/in-game-advertising/
CBS News. (16 july 2005). In-game advertising: article. Viewed on: 18-09-2007, from: http://www.cbsnews.com/stories/2005/07/15/tech/gamecore/main709467.shtml
Hotfrog. (13 August 2007) AdsNGames: Boost your sites appeal with casual games: press release. Viewed on: 18-09-2007, from: http://www.hotfrog.nl/Companies/AdsNGames-Ingame-Advertising/FullPressRelease.aspx?id=6168
Peer review of Article Rick. S by Claudia N.
Weblog article peer review form
Weblog Article Peer Review Form A – First Review
Writer’s Name ___Rick Slaathuis____________________________________
Assessor’s name Claudia Nieweg da Silva Marcos________________________________
Date __________25-11-2007_____________________________
Rating Scale: 1 = Yes 2 = Somewhat 3 = No
Rate the article by giving a 1, 2 or 3 for each question. Read the article once to geta general idea of what it is about, then read it a second time to rate it.
1. Is the topic interesting? __2__
2. Is the title original and appropriate? __2__
3. Is the introduction complete? _1___
4. Is the body of the article complete? __3__
5. Is the conclusion well-developed? __3__
6. Is the article well-organized overall? __3__
7. Is the article easy to understand? ___2_
8. Is the article interesting to read? __2__
9. Has the writer plagiarised material? _3___
Finally, read the article a third time and check it for spelling, grammar andpunctuation. Mark any corrections on the article itself then complete the rest ofthe form.
Name three things you like about the article. Interesting to read, subject is contemporary and with a little bit of humour._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Name Three things the writer should improve. Title, the textlenght and the structure.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
What is the gist of the article? New way of advertising on the popular website called YouTube_______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Do You think this article is good enough to pass the course? Explain your answer. No, the text isn’t enough._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Give the writer this completed form and the article with corrections.
Peer review of Article Claudia. N by Kimberly V.
Weblog article peer review form
Weblog Article Peer Review Form A – First Review
Writer’s Name Claudia Nieweg da Silva Marcos_______________________________________
Assessor’s name Kimberly Vegting_______________________________________
Date 24-09-2007_______________________________________
Rating Scale: 1 = Yes 2 = Somewhat 3 = No
Rate the article by giving a 1, 2 or 3 for each question. Read the article once to geta general idea of what it is about, then read it a second time to rate it.
1. Is the topic interesting? 1____
2. Is the title original and appropriate? 2____
3. Is the introduction complete? 1____
4. Is the body of the article complete? 1____
5. Is the conclusion well-developed? 2____
6. Is the article well-organized overall? 2____
7. Is the article easy to understand? 1____
8. Is the article interesting to read? 1____
9. Has the writer plagiarised material? 3____
Finally, read the article a third time and check it for spelling, grammar andpunctuation. Mark any corrections on the article itself then complete the rest ofthe form.
Name three things you like about the article. It’s interesting, easy to read and useful for he O’Neill campaign. _______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Name three things the writer should improve. Punctiuation, more use of the word ‘and’, some spelling mistakes should be corrected.
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What is the gist of the article? Sms Alerts are a new way to make a better connection and service to your customers.
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Do you think this article is good enough to pass the course? Explain your answer. Yes because it is a good article, easy to read and interesting. _______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Givet he writer this completed form and the article with corrections.
Article version 1 Claudia N.
Claudia N. Date: 17-09-07
CV203C2
Words: 573
Sms Alerts
There are dozens of types of sms services that companies can use to get to their customers. Letting the customer participate in contest, make a reservation for a movie or send them the latest info about your company are just a few examples. In the past years companies started specialising in sms advertising and marketing and developed new types of services. One of these services we’re going to use in our O’Neill project.
O’Neill
O’Neill is a gadget and clothing brand for surfdudes and hardcore snowboarders.As a company you always want a strong connection between you and your customers. You want the customers to have a good strong feeling about your brand so they will remain loyal to it. This group is very serious about surfing and snowboarding, it’s not just a sport…it’s a lifestyle to them. To make this group even more loyal to O’Neill we want to keep improving the service and make sure that this group has the latest info about surfing and snowboarding.
O’Neill is always looking for new and better ways to reach their customers. Sms services are a new way to get in touch with customers. Since almost everybody has a mobile phone it is a perfect way to send customized and personal smses.
The service
When a surfer or snowboarder lives in a region where they can practise their sport everyday they can sign up on the internet for a special sms alert service. We want to develop an sms alert service that will be specially custom designed for each region of a winter- or surfarea. This sms service provides you with: -the latest weather/water info, -where the big waves are going to be that day, -if there will be snowstorms and -O’Neill activity’s in that region like stores opening or surf/snowboardcamps. This way the surfer/snowboarder will always be the first one to know about al the activity’s about his sport in his area. He can get an sms in the morning telling him that the waves in some bay in his region are going to be very big. He does not have to go online or see the weather program on TV and even if he did that…he still wouldn’t know where the big waves are going to be. Subscribing for this service will be done on the O’Neill website where you will enter your phone number and the region that you want to receive information about.Per sms that you receive you will pay a small amount of money, maybe 5 cents more then what a normal sms costs.
This service is not only available for surfers/snowboarders who live in this area but also for people who are on vacation. For example if you are on holiday in Hawaii, you can subscribe for this service on the O’Neill webpage and receive these smses. When you leave and want to stop receiving this service you can send an sms with ‘stop’ to the same number and the sms service will be cancelled.
Win free sms service
When you go into the O’Neill store and buy clothes, with every article that you buy you get a code. With this code you can win free sms services, games, clothes and other stuff. You go to the O’Neill webpage and fill in the code to see immediately if you have won. That way you connect the Sms service to the webpage and to the clothes.
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